Hi Stained! I saw that you had entered this dark poem in the Writer's Cramp contest, so I wanted to read it. I would have loved to know what the prompt was, but if I had to guess, it would be to write something having to do with a ghost.

When I think of ghosts, I think of things like Casper the Friendly Ghost, or the one from the movie which Unchained Melody was about. Your poem had none of the above. I felt that the wording you used to call your ghost, Spirit, added to the dark, chilling, theme of your poem.

I thought the words which you chose to separate each stanza set the atmosphere well. Come, tells the tale of when the Spirit first announces itself and, most likely, chills the bones of the victim.

Stay, seems to describe the terrorizing experience.

Too Late, is self-expressing, in my opinion. It's meaning is that the victim had been overcome by the unfriendly spirit.

It was a good touch to end your poem similar to how it began, with the wording, Spirit in the night. I believe that added to the ghostly fear, which was more than hinted at in the poem.

How scary it must have been to the narrator, to hear an unknown presence whispering to them. I had the feeling that the narrator watched helplessly while the spirit tormented its victim.

The torment, I thought, seemed to escalate in the next stanza, where you described an almost torture from the spirit. Nice work in building up the terror in your scary poem.

The ending brought good closure.

One more comment, whoever gave you that black ribbon surely chose the perfect color. It assisted in setting the dark atmosphere before I read the first word.



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