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Rush Hour Open in new Window. [13+]
A woman dealing with the loss of a loved one.
by SophyBells Author Icon
Review of Rush Hour  Open in new Window.
In affiliation with House of Sensual Prose  Open in new Window.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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A "Game of Thrones"  Open in new Window. by Gaby Author Icon Review


Storyline:
Kate is having a rough day, torn between going home to freshen up or heading straight to the hospital to visit her dying father. She hates seeing him there, in that condition, and is flooded with memories of her mother's passing, and what watching her father wither away is doing to her emotionally.

Spelling/Grammar Issues:
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Description/Emotion:
Great imagery in this short story. I could feel Kate's despair while seeing her father now and remembering what he once was like. You made it easy to follow along on her journey as she made decisions not only about the day but how things were going to go moving forward, with the added insight into what happened when her mother passed away. This linked everything together nicely.

Overall Impression: You penned a well-crafted story. You tackled this heartbreaking story well, letting the reader know Kate's mindset, history, and why she refused to leave her father alone, even though he insisted she go to work. The memory of what they experienced when her mother was dying, and the actions Kate took tied everything together. The reader knows that even though it will be difficult, Kate is going to make sure that her father does not die alone, knowing full well he would the same for her.






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