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At the Bar Open in new Window. [ASR]
For Stormy-- using words "gown, change, soaking"
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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GAMES OF THRONES POEM REVIEW

This is a review for "At the Bar" Open in new Window. from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones" Open in new Window.

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*Reading* THE POEM

The poem has a prompt to use soaking, change, and gown. Interesting word choices lead to expression that makes you think about the way you treat people.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I loved the word play in the poem, simply because the interpretation will be different for each reader. Set in a bar, a man is waiting? haunted? by lingering past actions, or past words written in poetry. Ah, but to the reader it is all how you take it, and for me, it's to be mindful how you treat people because there are consquences.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a free form poem with no apparent rythme scheme.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to highlight the prompt words.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "soaking in shadows," -- it has such a negative vibe to it. It paints a visual in my imagination of someone sulking in the shadows, but also an emotional visual of someone who is trying to deal with disapointment.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The title sets "the setting" of the poem. The opening engages the reader. A good economy of words paints vivid pictures in the reader's mind. There's a deeper meaning to the poem if one takes time to let the poem resonate.

Reviewed by StephB for House Targaryen

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