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 Clandestine Services Open in new Window. [ASR]
Let's get out of here! Daily Flash Fiction Challenge entry.
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Hi Jeff, blame it on Gaby for all the visits.

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: Clandestine Services

First Impression: Initially I thought they're committing a crime because of the time noted after the building was empty of the janitorial staff. Although at the end I did wonder why they didn't enlist the janitorial staff's help. I guess the less conspirators involved the better to keep it a secret.

What needs your attention: No spag issues. I did want to thank you for your consistent use of larger font sizes in the things I did read in your port. 20/20 eye sight passed me by years ago.

What part I liked best: All the party decorations to make for a special birthday party for the company's ceo. I think it says a lot about the individuals that work for the ceo as well. It's more than just a boss and employee existence for them to go to the lengths they did to have everything in place.

Overall impression: A fun and quick read for the daily flash fiction contest. Two words to spare on the word count and the story felt complete, Nicely done. I think the pacing was good and the characters felt realistic.

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