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 Bubba's Corner BBQ Open in new Window. [E]
Best BBQ in Arkansas
by JCosmos Author Icon
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hi JCosmos Author Icon,

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Overall Impression:

This is a very interesting poem, dear author. It's unusual! It's a story, but also a poem, yet different to the poetic stories that I have read in the past. I cannot detect a specific form, nor rhyme. Well, I like things that are a little different, so here I am!

Sam and his wife Maria are looking for a restaurant called Bubba’s Corner BBQ. They ask for directions. Turns out there are multiple ones, and the best one's not even on a corner. The food is very good, though!

You worked with a very tricky prompt here. It's very specific and there were certain words that you could not use. I think you did well with it.

Suggestions:

I do have some suggestions, dear author. I hope that you'll find them helpful!

Stanza 3:

*Snow2* for driections as

Little typo - driections should be directions.

Stanza 6:

*Snow2* “our GPS says there are

'our' should be Our.

*Snow2* Five Bubba’s Corner BBQ’s

I suggest changing this to five Bubba's Corner BBQs.

Stanza 7:

*Snow2* the clerk smiled

'the' should be The.

*Snow2* There are a few more instances with sentences not starting with a capital letter in further stanzas - something to look at.

Stanza 11:

*Snow2* It is catawapmus

'catawapmus' should be catawampus.

Stanza 12:

*Snow2* of Ist

'Ist' should be 1st.

My Rating:

This is an interesting piece. Definitely something different.

I did have quite a few suggestions. You have something here, but it can do with another look. For that reason, for now, I will give this a rating of 3.5 out of 5.

Thank you for sharing your work.

Write on!

Kit

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