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Hi Bear

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: The Dolphin in the Moonlight

First Impression: Wow, what an amazing experience to have with a dolphin. They're such beautiful creatures. I've hear their interesting chatter and the way they respond back is truly remarkable. It's like they're partaking in a conversation with natural pauses.

What needs your attention: There's only one line that disrupts me when I read the poem out loud. Eyes swollen with salty tastes. What is the author trying to convery with salty tastes. It feels like a forced rhyme for this reader that doesn't work.

What part I liked best: I believe your poem begins with a loud whoosh because it sets the unusual event and takes the reader on the journey with them. Each stanza from the third to the end builds upon each other.

Overall impression: The outlier stanzas for this reader are the two beginning ones. I think the author would be better served by having an intro paragraph that sets up the poem than trying to work it in.
The remainder of the poem is beautiful done with lovely imagery.

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What does the Fox say????? Keep on writing.


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