Burned [13+] She was hot on the trail of the arsonsist, but was she getting too close....? |
The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise. Hello Scott Joseph! This review is given on behalf of "Game of Thrones" . Good mystery story of a woman tracking an arsonist. When they meet up he is not ready for what is about to happen. He's used to intimidation working. Not with this one, though. The Storyline/Plot - Very creative story with creative storytelling. You do a wonderful job bringing the story together and giving the reader a twist they didn't see coming. Great job! The Title and Description - Good title that drew my attention, and an excellent description that urged me to read on. The Characters - You do a wonderful job with dialog, and letting your readers get to know your characters. We quickly learn what kind of people they are, on the surface and deeper down. The Setting - Nice job with description and detail. I was easily able to envision each scene as I read. What I Liked Best - I liked how you tied up the whole story with the twist at the end. Nicely done! Below are a few suggestions below. Please use or discard them as you see fit. rain streaked rain-streaked sweat suit sweatsuit pockets and started A Comma is needed after pockets gallon size gallon-size silencer equipped silencer-equiped Thank you so much for sharing your wonderful story. I enjoyed it. Intuey My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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