The A-Team Cake and Buster Dog [E] ... half an hour before the birthday guests were to arrive, disaster struck ... |
Greetings from the House of Mormont! By participating in a Writing.com activity called "Game of Thrones" , I am in no way endorsing the GoT franchise or identifying as a fan thereof. I’m here to help my team win Ah, so we meet again, sir. I was looking under the Family genre and saw your item and knew it would be a good one. An excellent story of a good cake made even better by ingenuity, and “the icing on the cake” is, it’s true I never heard of that show, but it sounds like fun, and that party must have been a great experience for the kids. I can clearly picture the details of the cake and how the problem was solved by reshaping the scene. You’ve told the tale in the perfect way; it’s amazing that it’s a real story, because it writes so easily. Everything is there that I might be tempted to harp on: goals, stakes and obstacles; amusing characters including a dog, a granny, a bunch of boys, a clever mom. Your formatting is great, and there’s nothing at all I can see to change. Perhaps a word count at the top would be helpful, but as I’ve been browsing the genres lately I’ve learned how to do a long press on the items on my iPad to pop up the little section with an approximate word count before I open it. (All I have to access WdC with is an iPad and two Android phones… you’d be surprised at how much can be done here on a phone. And did you know that iOS snubs Comic Sans font, substituting a ridiculously formal and almost indecipherable font called Snell Roundhand? Don’t mind me, it’s just a pet peeve…) Thanks for sharing, take care and keep writing The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise. "The WDC Angel Army" My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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