Bubba's Corner BBQ [E] Trying to give a tourist directions to Bubba's |
Hello 👼intueyLet Your Light Shine I'm sending this review in connection with "Game of Thrones" . Positives The familiar, conversational style of this piece is excellent. It definitely feels like some local giving the reader directions and then, subsequently, a little backstory about Bubba's Corner BBQ. The pacing was excellent and it kept the reader's interest throughout with a unique and compelling narrative. I particularly like the excessively bizarre directions in the first half of the story; that was my favorite part of this short piece. Suggestions In the paragraphs where you're describing the hog's adventure, you use the phase "no one saw" a couple of times and it started to feel a bit redundant. I'm also not entirely sure about the explanation for why he's not on a corner. Is the idea that his original location burned down and then the business had to move (but still didn't change its name)? If so, I think that needs a little more clarification. If that's not what the story was trying to convey, then I missed it entirely! Overall Overall, this was a fun, lighthearted story to read and I thought you did a good job with the prompt. It reminded me of all the businesses that have unique names out there because there's a funny story behind it somewhere in their backstory. Nice job! Respectfully, Jeff "Rating & Reviewing Philosophy" DISCLAIMER: The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise. My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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