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Unmasked Open in new Window. [13+]
‘The Fox’ – El Zorro – was about to strike again. Flash Fiction
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"Game of ThronesOpen in new Window. Hello fellow writer! My name is Sandra. I am one of the sly foxes.
Title : Unmasked
First Impression: I just had to read this piece because, well, I am currently a fox, a House Florent fox. Surprise, surprise as ol' Gomer would say. This was not about an animal. Or what is it a different type/ species of fox/animal? Now I know 'zorro' means fox. This is an aha moment. This particular Zorro was caught red-handed with his, no, her pants down, er, in his clutches.
What needs your attention: Nothing unless I am too busy, preoccupied with laughing to notice. Wait a minute. I could suggest a comma before the 'but' in this sentence. "He stumbled out a confused explanation, but gave up." A minor, finicky thing.
What I liked best: May I choose all of this ? I was anticipating a read about a marauding fox, but instead I am subjected to a woman's clothes thief skulking about in the darkness. You set the scene with a man on horseback committing a silent vigil beneath a balcony belonging to a slumbering female. He has time to contemplate his own cleverness and skill with a pun and the soothing of his steed. You tease with the description of his savouring the woman's clothing which eludes to something more such as a rendezvous. The ending is a hilarious reveal. He is nothing , but a panty snatcher. Oh, and apparently a cross-dresser, too. How fortuitous for him that his victim is the same size.
Overall Impression: This turned out to be a flirty, fun bit of writing. Within a few words you introduce a mysterious cross-dresser thief and you utilize the given prompt words. Kudos. Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure. What does the fox say??? Listen carefully.
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