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| (4.0)| Hallo Papillon  ! I will be reviewing your work "Her" for "Game of Thrones"  Content: This is a short story that deals with a character's introspective thoughts about her relationship with a person she's always admired; yet there is more to this tale than meets the eye. Pluses:This isn't really a tale as it is a self-reflection - no pun intended for I see that the prompt used for this was based on a famous painting by Normal Rockwell of a girl looking into a mirror (although the image isn't actually here, I have seen it before and can clearly picture it while reading this piece). What starts out as a possible 'crush' is soon revealed to be the narrator going through stages of her life and painting a complete picture of who she truly was without even realizing it. She had always stood aside 'admiring' and idealized version of herself; feeling like she was an outsider and putting on a show for others. In the end, she comes to realize that she is merely an amalgamation of all the women she's admired over the years. Quite the powerful imagery at the end there. Suggestions:Here are a few things I noticed while reading. Please remember that these are only my suggestions/opinions and it's ultimately up to you to choose what works best. It almost seems silly making suggestions as this portfolio has not been visited in years, but the hope that is that it at least draws in readers to get an idea of what self-reflection is all about. With that said, I'll try my best not to point out the few typos and punctuation/grammar errors noted here and there. Still does not deter from the overall message of course.    You might no longer be a part of the Writing.com community, but we are glad this item still remains as a symbol of what you were able to contribute to the writing world. Thanks for sharing this with us. It was a pleasure to read.   Disclaimer: The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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