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 | Two Funerals and a Reunion  [E] A true story, could it be one last gift from my grandpa?  |
| (4.0)| Hallo Papillon ! I will be reviewing your work "Two Funerals and a Reunion" for "Game of Thrones"  Content: In this article, the writer gives us an insight into her feelings dealing with the loss of her grandfather, the return to her childhood home to put him to rest, and meeting up with childhood friends, which force her to re-evaluate the priorities in her life. Pluses: The introductory paragraph was full of wonderful imagery of the mountains and the home where you grew up. I could clearly visualize the scenery as you were in that car returning to where you felt you belonged. Nicely done. In the scene where you discuss how you heard the news of your grandfather's death was quite sad. I'm sure the reader will be able to empathize with having to confront such a revelation in the midst of ringing up customers and having to excuse yourself to go home. Even worse is having to rely on crying on the shoulder of someone you don't even really like. Regrets pour in, don't they? And the part where you state the irony of being in a place where you can buy anything but the one thing you really need - love? - excellent analogy there. I realize the funeral was a sombre situation, but the way you write all the events that surround it; from your family's reactions to the L.D.S (your grandpa's brother was a member) deciding to override the family's choices to just doing whatever they wanted, to you meeting up an old classmate from high school you still had a grudge with over her not returning a class ring, to learning there was a 20-year-school reunion taking place on the same weekend as your grandpa's funeral...whoosh! so much going on, eh? I like the way you summed up the entire events that took place at the end of this; that reunions and funerals were a way to say goodbye to what was in the past and then look forward to a better future. It can be a tough thing to do, but it is necessary for our mental health. Suggestions:Here are a few things I noticed while reading. Please remember that these are only my suggestions/opinions and it's ultimately up to you to choose what works best. >>Again, hate to pinpoint this; but should you - or anyone who knows you - decide to pop in to see revisit this story, it could use a bit of a touch up/editing especially with typos noted here and there. I realize this is a personal piece, but it could make for some difficult reading in some parts.   Thanks for sharing this intimate and introspective look at what would be a wonderful tribute to your grandfather and yet a chance to reunite and forgive old grievances in the class reunion situation. Thanks for sharing. It was a pleasure to read.   Disclaimer: The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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