Greetings Jeff !

I am currently reviewing as part of the tasks set by the "Game of Thrones" . I especially visited your port to dig your most precious gems then this piece appeared. In this review, I mainly focus on the positives of your piece and I may point some Areas for Improvement if found any. Without much a do, here are the things I noticed after delving deeper into the contents:


"Clandestine Services" flips the script on the classic spy thriller, transforming a seemingly high-stakes infiltration into a cleverly executed prank. The title and opening lines set the stage for a tale of espionage, complete with hushed tones, after-hours activities, and a clandestine operation. But the reveal of a birthday surprise orchestrated with "black ops" precision throws the reader a delightful curveball.

The story unfolds with a satisfying pace. The initial tension builds as the new partner struggles with entry, mirroring the pressure of a real covert mission. The ticking clock adds another layer of suspense, emphasizing the need for efficiency. Despite the limited character development, the dynamic between the mentor and the newbie is effective. The seasoned operative's encouraging words and subtle pride in imparting their expertise hint at a larger organization that relies on such "special missions." The new partner's initial frustration and eventual success create a relatable perspective for the reader, allowing them to connect with the challenges and triumphs of the operation.

The humor stems entirely from the absurd mismatch between the covert operation's execution and its ultimate purpose. The details – the "aerosol hissing" from the CEO's office contrasting the celebratory supplies being set up, and the meticulous cleanup erasing all traces of their "intrusion" – heighten the comedic effect. The story's strength lies in its unexpected conclusion. The final image of the CEO's office transformed into a birthday wonderland, complete with a literal clown car waiting to arrive, leaves a lasting impression. The reader can't help but imagine the CEO's bewildered (and likely unforgettable) reaction to such an outrageous surprise.

In conclusion, "Clandestine Services" is a short story that packs a punch. While the plot and characters are relatively simple, the execution is masterful. The story's humor and its clever subversion of genre tropes make it a thoroughly enjoyable read, perfect for anyone who appreciates a well-executed twist and a dash of absurdity.

Best regards,
Gervic