Greetings Angelica Weatherby- NaNo 14000 !

I am currently reviewing as part of the tasks set by the "Game of Thrones" . I especially visited your port to dig your most precious gems then this piece appeared. In this review, I mainly focus on the positives of your piece and I may point some Areas for Improvement if found any. Without much a do, here are the things I noticed after delving deeper into the contents:


The poem "Home" unfolds like a journey inwards, leading the reader from the familiar constraints of civilization towards a place of solace and natural beauty. The opening line establishes a clear contrast: the controlled smoothness of the asphalt road gives way to the rugged texture of the gravel path leading off the turnpike. This shift is further emphasized by the haunting cry of a coyote, a nocturnal predator that thrives in the wild. The mention of the "turnpike" hints at a previous world of traffic and noise, now left behind.

As the speaker ventures further, the poem's focus lifts skyward. The artificial lights of the city are replaced by a breathtaking display of stars, a natural light show that dwarfs anything human-made. This celestial spectacle further underscores the distance the speaker has traveled from the constraints of civilization. Here, the language is evocative – the stars "shine brightly," but their light is also described as "elusive," hinting at a deeper mystery.

The poem concludes with a tantalizing glimpse of the final destination – a house. However, the focus here is not on the structure itself, but rather on its surroundings. The crystallized stones with their "elemental color of Earth" create a powerful image of a dwelling that is deeply integrated with the natural world. We can almost feel the comforting solidity of the earth beneath our feet. The use of the word "elemental" suggests a connection to something primal and enduring, hinting at the enduring qualities the speaker seeks in "home."

While brief, "Home" uses vivid imagery and sensory details to create a strong sense of place. The poem doesn't explicitly tell us what "home" means to the speaker, but it allows us to infer a deep connection to nature, a sense of peace found in the embrace of the wild, and perhaps a longing for something authentic and enduring. Thank you for sharing this. Write on!


Best regards,
Gervic