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 | The Waiting Game  [13+] Mom knows best ... A Comedy Club Entry  |
| (4.5)| Hallo 🌖 HuntersMoon ! I will be reviewing your work "The Waiting Game" for "Game of Thrones"  Content: This is a short story written for a contest that required the writers to mix and match different genres within their works. From the cover image alone, something tells me this is going to be a fun one! Pluses:Dear Billy wakes up from a night of partying - the usual typing hangover situation - only in this scenario, he is visited by none other than good ol' Momma (from beyond the grave)! The ensuing conversation - as this story is dialogue heavy - was quite hilarious. As always, you are able to give the reader a good picture of what is taking place while setting up your characters with unique characteristics/personalities. Billy comes across as rather insensitive - I mean what was all that about poor Julie and her being a 'soft landing' (methinks Mom should make him take an extra time out just for that one alone). However, there's the underlying notion that Billy was too carefree and never really took good care of himself anyway. He might have been a good boy growing up, but who knows what troubles he got into as an adult that would lead him down this path? Either way, the dark comedy of this lies in the fact that his stint in Purgatory would involve his mother being her usual nagging self and keeping him in line - or of course having the option of walking through a particular set of doors to a place that was definitely not a sauna of choice. Methinks Billy will choose to suffer being with his mother all over again until his trial is set.     This was another enjoyable short story, and it was a pleasure to pop into your port for just a little visit. Thanks for sharing, and keep on writing!   Disclaimer: The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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