Greetings JACE !

I am currently reviewing as part of the tasks set by the "Game of Thrones" . I especially visited your port to dig your most precious gems then this piece appeared. In this review, I mainly focus on the positives of your piece and I may point some Areas for Improvement if found any. Without much a do, here are the things I noticed after delving deeper into the contents:


This excerpt, titled "Play Ball," is a nostalgic look back on a childhood shaped by baseball. The narrator employs vivid language to describe his all-consuming love for the game, spent countless hours playing with friends on a worn-down field. His father's Air Force career meant constant moves, but baseball remained a comforting constant, providing a sense of community and belonging. The narrator details his friendships with a motley crew of kids, each with their own personalities and positions on the makeshift field. Their camaraderie and passion for the game shine through in the way they transform a vacant lot into a personal baseball haven.

The story takes a heartwarming turn as the narrator's 12th birthday approaches. Anticipation builds as his dad hints at a special gift. While the narrator's mind races with possibilities – a new bike, a trip, or even freedom from chores – his dad surprises him with tickets to a Detroit Tigers game. The genius of the gift lies in the subtle detail that Dad, a Red Sox fan, prioritizes his son's experience over his own team loyalty. This selfless act speaks volumes about the strength of their bond.

The passage concludes with a powerful reflection on the lasting impact of this experience. The narrator connects the evocative smell of fresh peanuts to the memory of the game, a proof to the power of sensory details in transporting us back in time. More importantly, he witnesses a new side of his father, one filled with childlike joy and unbridled enthusiasm. This birthday transcends a simple celebration; it becomes a pivotal moment, forever cherished as a reminder of the shared passion for baseball that connects father and son. The closing line, though cryptic, hints at the importance of preserving these memories, perhaps through writing or storytelling, ensuring they are not lost to the passage of time. Thank you for sharing this. Write on!

Best regards,
Gervic