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Review #4744818
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 Your Choices Define Everything Open in new Window. [E]
Follow Morgan on her road to discovery.
by DR Rawson Author Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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*Tulipp* Greetings, DR Rawson ! I am reviewing this because I discovered it on Read & Review. *Smile* I also noticed you are new to Writing.com. Welcome! If you have any questions, don't hesitate to ask.

*Quill* First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest.

*Tulipo* What I Liked


         *Bulletv* I loved this! Short and sweet. I especially loved the mom's answer at the end. *Wink* A library has so much to offer.


*Tulipo* Suggestions/Comments to Consider

Just a few...

         her Mother *Right* her mother Unless you are addressing Mother, mother shouldn't begin with a capital M.

         said to her Mom *Right* said to her mom Unless you are addressing Mom, mother shouldn't begin with a capital M.

         "Where Mom, where." *Right* "Where, Mom, where?" It's a question.

         *Note* In your last paragraph, you might consider breaking it up into three paragraphs, due to the dialogue exchange. *Wink*


*Tulipo* Final Thoughts

         I worked in an elementary library for eight years before taking a job in a village library as a library director. I love books, especially children's books. What you've written here is so true! Children (and anyone else) can travel in a library. *Smile* I love libraries! *Heart*


Have a great day and...*Quill*
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