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Hello fellow writer! My name is Sandra. I am one of the sly foxes.
Title: Hammock Haters Unite
First Impression: Well , with a title like this I just had to wander in and test out your hammock. You raise valid anti-hammock points here. They could be dangerous to one's overall health. Suspended above the ground and dangling without a care in the world sounds heavenly. Disaster may well lurk though. Accidents often strike when we are relaxed and not anticipating them. It is that void of fear that leads to our downfall.
What needs your attention: I believe the correct terminology is ' lying on a hammock. ' To lay means to place something and yes, you do place your body to lie. Lie is the verb, the action of doing. May I suggest a well-placed comma before the word 'but'.
What I liked best: I am interpreting this piece as a tongue-in-cheek warning. Maybe you have actual intentions to ban hammocks. I do not know. When I notice people reposing in them I think they appear content, relaxed and enjoying their opportunity to languish. I have personally sprawled in one in Cuba and at my Canadian seasonal campsite. They are rather comfy and sometimes they can be encouraged to sway with the breeze. I do understand your stance. I am an avowed klutz and as such do not relish the many falls I experience much less invite another one. Hammocks do not come equipped with safety railings, or stairs. Lounge chairs present their own challenges. They also may not be suitable for the faint of heart.
Overall Impression: This advice/call to action has its merits. Have you initiated a support/protest group? Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure. What does the fox say? Listen carefully.
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