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Hi Norb, it's been a while.

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: We Don't Age

First Impression: What caught my eye was the odd picture beside the title so I was curious how they connected together. And I see you didn't disappoint either. Evolution never did have that in mind speaks volumes to this reader.

What needs your attention: In the first stanza, it's just the carrying on of carrying on feels forced to this reader. Every other line in both stanzas flows nicely but this one is clunky.

What part I liked best: The second stanza says so much to me about life opening with a rose that have lots of thorns which plays in very well to the plans aren't the same as we arranged. Hell no they're not because I would have never buried a grandchild. Nor would I live in fear of a phone call that says my son (grandson's dad) has finally succeeded in his death. I know you all to well what kind of pain that inflicts. The ending feels like closure to me reminding the reader that our time is in the moment and we need to live now.

Overall impression: A thought provoking poem that not only reminds the reader of her own life's journeys but also that the author struggles on his as well. The connection in life we all need.

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What does the Fox say????? Are you missing Charlie too?


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