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My name is Angelica, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: The Destroyer

First Impression: Started out with it, it destroying everything in its path. There is no stopping it with its sole purpose to destroy everything. All of the good things got destroyed by it. When there was nothing left to destroy, the creature wept. A baby was born. Maybe it found a new purpose in life and stopped crying then. This story was short and to the point. It describes the action of the destroyer. What it can do. It turns out that the destroyer is a creature, a living thing with emotions. I imagine it would be very difficult, but there is hope of seeds left behind to plant new trees and build society back up. Creator is what the destroyer will become.

This story is good, but more details would benefit it. Expanding and showing the destroyer in action until there was nothing left to destroy. Then a baby born gave the destroyer an idea to create the world or create another destroyer. Which ever way the destroyer decides to go from there on. The creature has emotions, show it more. There is a lot of potential in this story. It could develop into having a longer plot.

What needs your attention: No spelling or grammar errors found.

What part I liked best: The creature decided not to go for the baby but to just watch and find that to be enough.

Overall impression: Good story- it has a lot of potential. Details could be expanded a bit and the creature, destroyer, could be shown to have feelings. Even if the feelings is to just destroy things in the beginning. In the end maybe the creature had a change of heart and want to be the repairer of everything good. To bring good back into the world. Still being a destroyer, has a tendency to want to destroy when good comes into fruit. Good job and keep up the good work!

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.

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