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Bubba's Corner BBQ Open in new Window. [E]
Trying to give a tourist directions to Bubba's
by 👼intuey Author Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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First impression:

This story gives the expression "hog wild" a whole new meaning. It also makes me wonder if that hog is still around. Maybe it earned its right to live out its life naturally after causing that much consternation.

What works:

The whole scene with the hog being chased across town, the way it ran into the open doors of Bubba's Corner BBQ when it was on the corner and all through to the kitchen where it set the whole building on fire was pure slapstick. I would normally be appalled at the idea of an animal (even one that is considered part of the food chain) to have to endure such an ordeal, but the story is so over the top that it is funny in the same way that Tom and Jerry or Itchy and Scratchy are funny.

What needs work:

No one saw hot wood fly into the trashcan
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No one saw it until it caught some aprons on fire *Right* there isn't anything wrong with this. Since it was written for the Cramp, I am not counting this down as a mistake, but the mention of "No one saw" twice in such a short piece could use some editing down the line. I think the first mention with the trashcan could be reworded. It felt more organic to have that phrase the second time it shows up.

Final thoughts:

Cartoon chaos and small town silliness meet at the corner of nothing to see here (anymore) and "we have the best BBQ in town - we'll cook your house whole if you wish.

Annette
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