I love this intro. It definitely makes me want to read more of the novel that this is written for. The teaser provided in the title description sounds really good. A ghost ship sounds very exciting. The opening is described really well with the primary character in this intro (Julie) kayaking at Sunset. It is a beautiful image to picture. The opening paragraph does a great job of setting up who she is allowing the reader to connect with her. We know she is experienced sailor as she serves as a navy instructor. It also gives the reader a good sense of where this is happening (2 miles off the coast)

The excitement builds right away as she encounters the mysterious ship. It is described well allowing the reader to visualize what it looks like. One of the great bits of setups for this scene is that the sun fades out of the sky as the ship comes into view setting the encounter at dusk. It is the best time of day for thriller to take place.

The abrupt ending serves as the perfect hook and I was definitely hoping that I could read more of this and I think other readers would feel the same. We are left wondering what she was seeing aboard the ship with only the word death as a hint of what is to come. It is very exciting.

Great writing. This is everything you want an intro to be. It gives a good setup, introduces the character and ship and has a great hook pulling the readers into it. I hope that you continues this story and I hope that I am able to read more of this in the future. Best of luck with your writing.



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