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Hi Pernille

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: The Coffee War

First Impression: Absolutely hilarious. Though I would have been one of the protestors because I'm an coffee addict. No one wants to be around me without coffee. The coffee coming out of the faucet was creative genius. I laughed a lot at the UN declaring coffee as a drug, a potentially dangerous drug.

What needs your attention: I didn't note any grammar or punctuation issues, but in all honesty I didn't look either I was to engrossed in reading your story.

What part I liked best: I enjoyed despite the goverment decision to ban coffee people were finding ways to get their coffee fix. People will definitely do what is needed to regain something they love. Although I didn't see filling the water reservoir with coffee coming, it was the perfect revenge at the government's new law. Burning the government buildins was an added bonus.

Overall impression: I thought the pacing in the sotry was good. The antagonist got what she deserved for abolishing coffee. How dare she take away a life force staple.

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What does the Fox say????? I don't know about you but this fox is consuming a lot of coffee doing all these reviews.


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