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Wile E Coyote and The Roadrunner  [18+] Wile E, Coyote fires Acme Corporation and Files Law Suit  |
| (4.5)| Hallo Chrys O'Shea - Writing again ! I will be reviewing your work "Wile E Coyote and The Roadrunner" for House Targaryen on behalf of "Game of Thrones"  Content: With a summary like that, what can one expect from such a story? Hijinks and shenanigans? Probably, since those two get along like oil to water (is that how the saying goes?). It should be interesting to see how this case pans out. Pluses: Ah, I saw this and thought I was going through a severe case of deja-vu. I was sure I had read this before, and then remembered it was for an entry in "Wonderland" , yes? Good idea to make it into a separate static item because it was a good read. The cover and story image should bring back memories for those who are familiar with the cartoon characters/show, and for those who are clueless about it, just by looking at the image, they can have an idea of the dynamic between the two. One is hellbent on causing damage, the other is just minding his own business running around as per his name. In your story, 'poor' Wile E. appears to have gotten into a rather tight spot where products purchased from the once trusted Acme Corporation, caused him great bodily harm. What's one to do but sue the ones responsible for giving him so much grief? And of course, the next thing to do is find a new shop where you are able to purchase as many dangerous items as you want - The Home Depot. But that's not all! To help with this case, Wile E. goes all out and hires the infamous Ken Starr (might remember him from the Clinton case a few years back) as his lawyer. With such a guy on his team, there's no way he can't win this lawsuit, right? Unfortunately, with the honourable Judge Judy presiding over the case, our troubled protagonist (or antagonist in this case) has no chance of getting what he wants. Since the prompt had requested for you to put famous people in history in 'ridiculous/normal' situations, this was fun to see your choice of characters. You definitely know your Acme-related stories, and it was evident in your writing. Suggestions:Here are a few things I noticed while reading. Please remember that these are only my suggestions/opinions and it's ultimately up to you to choose what works best. >>...you who have suffered bodily harm.(") >>"Yes, your Honor.(") >>It has been rumored that Home Depot may be having second thoughts.(") (Missing closing dialogue quotation marks there)   Thanks for sharing this fun little piece with us. It was a delight to read. Keep on writing!   Disclaimer: The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 04/15/2024 @ 2:39pm EDT