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 Building Castles Open in new Window. [E]
As a writer there is nothing greater in life or death than what we leave behind.
by Keaton Foster: Know My Hell! Author Icon
Review of Building Castles  Open in new Window.
Review by JayNaNoOhNo Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
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This is a "Game of Thrones" Open in new Window. review!


Hello, Keaton Foster: Know My Hell!!

*Checkb*Overall Impression:
This evokes a strong sense of legacy and permanence. The metaphor of constructing something enduring, like castles, powerfully encapsulates the aspiration of writers to leave behind something that outlasts their own brief existence.

*Checkb*Form, Rhythm, Cadence, and Style:
The poem's free verse structure suits its introspective theme, allowing the thoughts to flow freely without the constraint of a rigid metrical pattern. This choice emphasizes the boundlessness of the poet's aspirations. The rhythm is meditative, which anchors the poem’s thematic concerns. While generally smooth, the cadence has moments of abruptness in lines like "I don’t know / When it will be done," which effectively convey a sense of uncertainty and the daunting nature of the creative process.

*Checkb*Content:
The poem beautifully juxtaposes the tangible act of building with the intangible nature of legacy. The image of fortresses "unable to be raised to ruin" powerfully symbolizes works that withstand the test of time. However, the line "Some will come and stand beyond the gates" introduces a poignant sense of separation between the creator and the audience, underscoring the solitude of creation and the unknown impact of one's work. The whole poem is underscored by the depth of metaphor.

*Checkb*Grammar and Mechanics:
The mechanics of the poem are solid, with careful attention to line breaks. The way the line breaks were handled results in the lack of punctuation being a non-issue.

*Checkb*Final Thoughts:
This idea is both haunting and inspirational, drawing the reader into contemplation of their own legacies. It's thoughtful and meaningful and will have a significant emotional impact on its readers.

Thank you for sharing your work with us!

JayNaNoOhNo Author Icon*Smile*


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