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 What does that say about me??? Open in new Window. [E]
I wrote this July 3, 2015, the day after my birthday.
by Chaka-khan Wigfall Author Icon
Review by Jayne Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello, Chaka-khan Wigfall!

*Checkb*Overall Impression:
You've invited readers into a deeply personal introspection of the speaker's life and choices. This piece strikes a chord with its raw honesty and vulnerability.

*Checkb*Form, Rhythm, Cadence, and Style:
The poem's free verse structure fits well with its conversational and reflective tone. The repetition of the question, "What does that say about me?" serves as a poignant refrain, punctuating the speaker’s self-examination, effectively driving home the theme of self-awareness and regret. The rhythm varies, which adds a dynamic quality to the poem.

*Checkb*Content:
Lines like "I tend to take the easy way out" and "I tie my lies in a neat little bow" reveal a struggle between the desire to appear flawless and the recognition of personal flaws. The honesty in acknowledging these contradictions makes the poem relatable and compelling. It offers a window into the complexities of self-identity and the human condition.

The poem’s strength lies in its candidness and the relatability of questioning one’s choices and motives. This piece encourages readers to reflect on their lives and the facades they may maintain.

*Checkb*Grammar and Mechanics:
The poem's informal structure and casual language reflect the speaker’s personal musings and enhance its approachability. I found no problems of note with grammar or spelling.

Normally, I would have reservations about the uneven punctuation, but in this case, I think it works. Using commas and periods helps to pace the reader’s journey through the speaker's contemplations, and the ellipsis at the end indicates this is an ongoing process rather than a concluded one.


*Checkb*Final Thoughts:
This is a raw, thought-provoking poem that beautifully captures the essence of introspection and the continuous journey toward self-understanding.

Thank you for sharing your work with us!

Jayne Author Icon*Smile*


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