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 |  | Universe According To The Oldest Sister  [E] A woman honors her sister's art as she gets older. A Writer's Cramp entry.  |
| (5.0)| Hallo Fivesixer ! I will be reviewing your work "Universe According To The Oldest Sister" for House Targaryen on behalf of "Game of Thrones"  Pluses: I'm curious. Is the first line that's in bold a line to a song, because it sounds awful familiar. If not, it leads into the beginning of a touching poem/prose about two sisters; where one seems to be having signs of dementia as she gets older and the other does her best to adjust to the changes - which is never easy. This hit a little close to home because I work with dementia patients and have seen both sides of the coin; the patient who one minute is sound of mind and can have lengthy discussions with you, and in the next minute, can turn around and wonder who the heck you are. It's not easy for the family/carers either, for they have to try to keep up with these personality shifts as best as possible. They have to watch the person they once knew almost become a complete stranger. Sometimes it's even tough to find the love for them especially if they get to a stage where they are treated like the 'enemy'. For your poem, you've managed to capture that feeling of helplessness yet wonder all at the same time. For the younger sister, her sister's drawings are a gift and a treasure; all her random musings are magical paths that only big sis can understand, and even if it doesn't make any sense, she still keeps them in a place of prominence in their home. She still remembers how brilliant her older sister used to be, and perhaps this new version of her is still a form of brilliance, just the kind that will take some getting used to.   Thanks for creating this poem to show the bond and love these sisters have for each other. I should think that those who might be experiencing such things at home, right now, would read this and feel a sense of strength and inspiration to keep going and to never give up. There should still be the belief that the person they love is still trapped within that deteriorating mind. Keep on writing!   Disclaimer: The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 04/16/2024 @ 8:39pm EDT