Greetings Gaby !

I am currently reviewing as part of the tasks set by the "Game of Thrones" . I especially visited your port to dig your most precious gems then this piece appeared. In this review, I mainly focus on the positives of your piece and I may point some Areas for Improvement if found any. Without much a do, here are the things I noticed after delving deeper into the contents:


"Inner Demons" paints a vivid picture of internal struggle masked by a cheerful facade. The poem sets the stage with a sense of forced calmness. The opening line, "All is calm within these walls," is immediately undercut by the second line, "a facade erected to fend off foes." This contrast between the presented exterior and the hidden battle within is a recurring theme. The "empty smile" and "rainbows of glitter" further emphasize a surface-level happiness that doesn't reflect the turmoil beneath.

The poem delves deeper with the speaker feeling "shrunk and shriveled" on the inside, hiding the pain of daily struggles. This vulnerability is amplified by the question "Where are my friends? Where have you been?!" Here, the poem cleverly suggests a sense of isolation despite the social performance. The speaker might be surrounded by people, but their true pain goes unnoticed.

The final two stanzas are particularly impactful. Raising a glass "to friends and foes" creates a sense of hollowness, a toast devoid of real connection. The image here isn't just one of loneliness, but of a disconnect so deep that even those who might try to help are perceived as part of the problem. The closing image is even more haunting. As the speaker finds temporary solace in sleep, the demons cheer, a chilling reminder of the ongoing battle within. The line "they accomplished their goal" is ambiguous, leaving the reader to ponder whether sleep brings a temporary reprieve or simply allows the demons to regroup for the next day.

Overall, "Inner Demons" effectively uses contrasting imagery and emotional language to portray a struggle with inner demons masked by a facade. The poem's strength lies in its relatable exploration of internal conflict and the feeling of being unseen despite putting on a brave face. It's a poignant reminder that appearances can be deceiving, and that sometimes the battles we fight are hidden from the outside world. Thank you for sharing this. Write on!

Best regards,
Gervic