FIRST IMPRESSION:Hi Webwitch! Your chapter series, Windy City Tales, was highlighted in your port. To me, it looked really intriguing. The idea of a Private Detective story from the 1930s seemed like it would be very interesting, and I was impressed that you were able to write such a thing. I was also impressed that you won a couple of very nice awardicons for it. Megan really has beautiful awards. After I thoroughly read this story, I realized that it deserved this award and more!

THOUGHTS: I saw this story and thought it would be a fun thing to read while I was relaxing in bed last night before sleep. Webby! You are such a very talented storyteller!! My gosh! I was in awe with every word! I always knew that you are brilliant at setting up fun activities, which the entire site has fun with. I learned yesterday that you are a fine poet. But this! This is amazing!

Often my husband and I listen to old-time radio while on very long car rides. I used to try to read my sci-fi books, but it was too distracting with the radio blasting, so I caved and simply listened to Johnny Dollar with him instead. I liked it! I am sincere in saying that I thought your story was just as good, heck, even better than those old-time radio broadcasts. Nicely done, indeed.

FAVORITE PART: I must say that what I liked the most about your story was the voices that you gave to your characters. The language you gave them in their words was very believable, and it made me feel like this story was absolutely taking place in the 1930s. The entire story had a gangster and mobster feel from the beginning to the end.

Your opening was great, as it set the stage for the rest to come. You gave a glimpse of the main characters, though your readers learn more as we read through the rest of the captivating story. Yes, when it ended, while I was half asleep in bed, I nearly forgot that I was reading a WDC story. The whole thing reads like a good page-turner novel. I thought, 'Oh, that's the end. I guess I better get to sleep now.' Yes, I was very into that story!

You thought up a wonderful plot. Poor Gloria, new in town, met a guy named Vinny Lo Bianca and thought he was nice. It was only until she saw him killing a person from a distance, that she realized he was bad. Nervously, (and smartly) she ran off to seek help and that's when she came upon the office of this small-town Private detective, Lou Ryan.

He agreed to help Gloria and wow, what an adventure that turns into! I felt that you executed the display of this adventure really well. You even mentioned Capone at one point, which I thought added a more gangster feel to the story.

The ending was sweet! I love happy endings, and (of course) your character, Low Ryan, lives to fight crime another day!

SUGGESTIONS: I mentioned that I really, really loved the 1930s Chicago character voices. With that said, there were a few mentions that I will need to look up. One was, 'transom'. I still don't know what it is. An elevator?
'Smarmy', is another example.
Maybe for some of the old-time lingo, I would have liked a glossary at the end of the story, or maybe a subtle explanation causally slipped into the writing.
While none of that took away from the excitement of your captivating story, it's just something I thought I'd mention.

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My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .