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 Review #4747043 |
 | Slynokio  [18+] Don't read this or you'll have nightmares.  |
| Hello Angelica Weatherby- NaNo 14000! This review is given on behalf of "Game of Thrones" . This is a cute story. I was afraid the boy was a trap. I'm glad it wasn't. I didn't want to see what happened to the woman happen to the dragon.  I thought it was creative how he decorated his cave.The Title and Description - The name is unique and drew me to your piece. I would write a little bit about what your story is about under the description. Although, to be honest, what you have there did urge me to read on. The Characters - Your characters are entertaining, and the writing did make me care about them. The Setting - Good job on writing the descriptions and details that helped me to envision each scene as I read. What I Liked Best - The personality of the dragon. I'd space some of your paragraphs, so it'd make it easier to read, and be easier on the eyes. I have a few suggestions for you below. Please use or discard them as you see fit.  Eyes piercing Eyes pierced  the eldest woman went,the elderly woman made,  a mullberrya mulberry  slight sound A comma is needed after sound  Nothing. Grass swayedThe grass  Meanwhile the predatorA comma is needed after Meanwhile  dark colored dragon dark-colored dragon  two week old dragontwo-week-old Thank you so much for sharing your story with us. I enjoyed it!  Tracey"When you play the Game of Thrones you win, or you die." Cersei Lannister   The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 04/22/2024 @ 3:22pm EDT