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 The Private Detectives WC 295 Open in new Window. [E]
The team of Logan Gilhooly and Shamus McDonald set out to solve a crime.
by jackiesmuse Author Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Review of The Private Detectives by jackiesmuse Author Icon

This one actually made me laugh out loud. It was the discussion about hearing a noise or thinking one heard a noise that did it. Which is very close to the beginning and has an important role in setting the tone for the whole piece. You really must add Comedy to the list of genres - substitute it for Contest Entry (nobody searches for that one).

I also loved the names. They, too, prepare one for the comedy in the piece. And that's the real strength of the whole thing - it is united into a powerful tour de force of the Comedy genre, everything serving that aim and building to a fitting denouement at the end.

Once again, you should edit those genres.

As a Mystery or Crime/Gasngster, I'm not quite so sure. The source of the "noise" was soon revealed and we never did learn what gave our two detectives the idea of searching the house. It may have been a connection to the Mob but we aren't told that. Not that it matters for the story, but I guess it does for the genre.

In summary, it's a delightful example of the best in flash fiction, instantly establishing its characters, placing them in a slightly ridiculous situation, and then tying everything up neatly in the end with a flamboyant bow. Excellent work and I won't even mention the occasional misplaced quotation mark.

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