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Lemonade Girls Detective Agency Open in new Window. [ASR]
A lemonade stand turns out to be a secret business
by Maryann Author Icon
Review by 👼intuey Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Hello Maryann! This review is given on behalf of "Game of Thrones" Open in new Window..

*Reading* This is a cute story. The little lemonade girls are starting young in solving their community's mysteries. A couple of little Nancy Drews. A creative little tale. Nice job!

The Title and Description - Great title that fits the story perfectly. The definition piqued my curiosity and urged me to read on!

The Storyline/Plot - Two little girls use their lemonade stand as a front to their Detective agency. There they solve crimes like what happened to their teacher's apple, to where their friend's teddy bear disappeared to.

The Characters - Great job on showing the reader the two little girl's personalities in such a short piece. Their eagerness and innocence shine through.

The Setting - Nice job on writing the descriptions and details so I was easily able to envision each scene as I read.

What I Liked Best - I liked the overall story. I did feel for the poor dog who was so happy to have found a new toy. *Laugh*

Below are a few minor suggestions. Please use or discard them as you see fit.

*Bookopen* second grade

second-grade

*Penv* lunch time.

lunchtime

*Tack* At first I

A comma is needed after first

*Bookstack2* Today, we would be

Today, we will be

Thank you so much for sharing your writing with us. I enjoyed it.

*Heart* Tracey

"When you play the Game of Thrones you win, or you die." Cersei Lannister
House Lannister image for G.o.T.



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