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 | My Little Voice  [E] Just more energy needing out.  |
 This is a "Game of Thrones" review!Hello, Wanda Jane!  Overall Impression:This touches on trauma, loss, and recovery through the metaphor of a child's suppressed voice. You've navigated the delicate topics of personal anguish and eventual healing quite well, making this a powerful and resonant piece. Form, Rhythm, Cadence, and Style:The poem has a mostly steady rhyme scheme and rhythmic cadence, which mirrors the fluctuations between despair and hope experienced by the narrator. Each stanza builds on the emotional depth, culminating in a cathartic release as the voice is found. The use of form helps to lighten the heavy subject matter and convey the complexity of emotions delicately. Content:You explore the profound impact of trauma, explicitly addressing themes of abuse and neglect. The poem delves into the psychological aftermath of such experiences, reflecting on how these traumatic events fragment the sense of self and the challenges in rebuilding an identity distinct from that imposed on you. The poem’s narrative arc—from suppression to revelation and acknowledgment—encourages a powerful reflection on healing and reclaiming your own voice. Grammar and Mechanics:Using straightforward language enhances the narrator's credibility and allows the weight of the words to resonate with the reader. While it's generally well-executed, going over some lines, particularly in the first stanza, for rhythm consistency could ensure the flow is as smooth as possible for the best reading experience. Final Thoughts:The poem addresses challenging themes with sensitivity and insight, crafting an evocative and hopeful narrative. With a bit of polishing of the rhythm, the message could have an even more significant impact. Thank you for sharing your work with us! JayNaNoOhNo   My approach to reviews: "I'll Explain, but not Disclaim" The views and opinions in this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and, therefore, do not necessarily reflect the group, activity, and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.
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