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A visit to Fishermen's Wharf followed by Cable Car pandemonium, frays a family's nerves.
by Ẃeβ࿚ẂỉԎḈĥmas Author Icon
Review by Annette Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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First impression:

The title combined with the intro line made me worry about losing my own kids in a crowd. I think every parent has had that moment of dread. Luckily none of mine was ever lost for long. But whew.

What works:

The panic felt by the father and mother in law was palpable. One of mine once almost stayed behind on a train. It was an underground train in Berlin and there is no way to run after it once it leaves the station. It was my youngest too and he was a little boy with no German. I forgot how we got him back, but we got him back.

What needs work:

Nothing really. I think there is a train or tram thumbnail that StoryMistress made available. It would be a fitting addition to this story.

Final thoughts:

I did enjoy reading this, but mostly because you seemed to not be too worried the whole time. Or you were so happy when it was over and you had your daughter back that you chose humor rather over fear. I was always so paranoid that something could happen to my kids. In a strange city no less. I am glad that you never really lost sight of the train and that the cable car authority was able to reuninte child and father ASAP. I hope your daughter paid more attention to the group from there on out.

Annette
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