You do a great job of showing Hubert's evolution from scapegoat to having a pivotal role in a royalist uprising. His actions, speech, and inner monologue all support this metamorphosis, resulting in an engaging character arc.

The conflict between Hubert and Prince Hal, which stems from their unequal status and treatment, is a key driving force in your story. The resolution of this conflict, with Hubert ultimately gaining power over his former oppressor, is satisfying and provides a sense of closure. The moment Hubert decides to join the rebellion against the monarchy symbolizes a larger shift in power dynamics within the kingdom, adding depth to your story's themes of justice and revenge.

Your incorporation of aspects of medieval feudal society—the use of whipping boys and the power dynamic between nobles and commoners—really strengthened your story's depth and sense of realism. The medieval practice of whipping boys, in particular, serves as a poignant symbol of Hubert's mistreatment and his lower status. The narrative builds a complex, realistic, and authentic world by emphasizing this historical detail.

Hubert's actions and motivations serve as a vehicle for the story's exploration of justice and revenge. His desire to exact revenge for his mistreatment raises complex and provocative questions about power and morality. His motivation to join the insurrection stems from his pursuit of justice—for himself and the oppressed people of the kingdom. This theme spans the entire the narrative, offering a gripping undercurrent that advances the plot and gives the characters' motivations strong nuance.

There is room for some of the dialogue to be more lively and interesting, especially in the exchanges between Hubert and Prince Hal. In order to sustain momentum and keep the reader interested in the story, the story's pacing could also be improved, especially in the middle.

The conversation between Hubert and Prince Hal during their sparring match could use more varied language and tone to increase the tension and emotional impact of the scene. To keep the story moving quickly and keep the reader interested, the middle portion, which focuses on Hubert's participation in the rebellion, could be shortened or simplified. Consider adding more emotional nuance and subtext to the dialogue to better convey character motivations and feelings. To build a sense of urgency and tension, consider using shorter sentences. Remove any unnecessary details or scenes that impede the narrative flow; concentrate on the crucial exchanges and events that further the plot or help the characters grow in order to increase the pacing.

Hubert has well-developed and clear motivations. Prince Hal, however, could use more well-defined and evident motives. Understanding the reasoning behind his actions would add another layer of depth to his character. The transition of Prince Hal from a spoiled prince to a careless monarch is alluded to but not thoroughly explored. His behaviors, including how he treats Hubert and runs the kingdom, lack a clear explanation, which can give the impression that his character is less developed than Hubert's. You could create some scenes or dialogue that explore Prince Hal's inner thoughts and feelings in order to further develop his character, particularly in connection to his relationship with Hubert and his methods for leading the kingdom. Demonstrate reflective or doubtful moments to highlight his character's depth and his challenges fulfilling his regal obligations.

Although establishing the final conflict is crucial, a more subtle use of foreshadowing could heighten the tension and intrigue before its big reveal. The Red Hand Rebellion is introduced rather abruptly, and Hubert's decision to join the cause comes across as hurried and underdeveloped. There's room to integrate more foreshadowing of this event into your story. Giving your readers hints and clues sprinkled throughout can build suspense and mystery. Consider including details of the rebellion earlier in your narrative, perhaps through gossip or conversations among the villagers. Allude to Hubert's discontent with the current situation and his developing empathy for the rebels, which gradually escalates towards his ultimate choice to become one of them. The story building to the climax can become more captivating and immersive with this kind of gradual buildup.

Your story is a gripping tale that examines themes of justice, revenge, and social hierarchies in a medieval context and provides a thought-provoking exploration of morality and power. One of your story's strongest points is Hubert's character development, which is skillfully depicted as he goes from being a scapegoat to becoming the leader of a rebellion against the monarchy. Through the use of historical context and meticulous attention to detail, you were able to immerse me in a vivid and captivating world.

Your story has all the elements of an engrossing story. With some polish added to the dialogue, character development, and foreshadowing your story could be even more vivid and captivating. You have strong storytelling skills and I can't wait to read more of your work.

Write on!