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Hi Tommy Gunns

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: Goin' Crazy With You

First Impression: The author's intention is for this poem/lyrics to be put with music. I tried to imagine maybe a piano or a guitar alone in my head as I read.

What needs your attention: In the first stanza we have hair, wear, eyes, lips, hips and by which all feel nature. In the second stanza we have hi, goodbye,keep, coffee, tea and sleep. Coffee and tea as you rhyme feels like the author took the easily way. May I suggest It’s not the way you drink your coffee, its not the way your face shines with glee because in the next line we have It’s not the way you sigh when you’re driftin’ off to sleep. It feels more like a natural transition.

What part I liked best: I really like the couplets that come after the first and second stanza It’s not the way my heart races when I’m alone with you It’s not the way my temp’rature rises when you thrill me like you do. It reminds the reader that the lover is filling him/her with each image.

Overall impression: Thank you for sharing your song lyrics with us. I thought the majority of the words delivered building upon each other.

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What does the Fox say?????


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