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'Twas the Night Before Christmas ... Open in new Window. [E]
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by 🌕 HuntersMoon Author Icon
Review by Jeff Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello 🌕 HuntersMoon

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*Penw* Positives

I love the way you captured the warmth and chaos of a family Christmas with young children. The narrative voice is delightful, bringing humor and a light-hearted tone that many will find relatable and engaging. The dialogue is authentic and adds depth to the characters, particularly the father's interaction with his children, which is really endearing. This was a really great flash fiction story!


*Penw* Suggestions

While the story flows well, you might consider enhancing the sensory descriptions to further immerse the reader in the scene. Additionally, I think exploring the children’s perspective a bit more could add another layer of engagement, providing insight into their excitement and thoughts about Santa’s visit.


*Penw* Overall

This is a charming and amusing tale that perfectly encapsulates the spirit of Christmas through the eyes of a loving, if slightly beleaguered, parent. The story’s strength lies in its ability to blend humor with tender family moments, making it a delightful read for anyone who has experienced the joys and trials of a family holiday. Your portrayal of the father’s inventive, albeit flawed, plan to ensure his children’s belief in Santa is both funny and heartfelt. Great job!


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