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Escapism Open in new Window. [13+]
"Don't you understand? When you give up your dream, you die." A "What's Your Line Entry"
by 🌕 HuntersMoon Author Icon
Review of Escapism  Open in new Window.
Review by Jeff Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Hello 🌕 HuntersMoon

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*Penw* Positives

This story effectively combines elements of sci-fi and psychological thriller, creating a narrative that captures the reader's attention from the beginning. The imagery is intriguing and the transitions between story elements are handled with skill, providing a strong impact. The use of sensory details, such as the sound of the translator and the physical sensation of the knife, enhances the realism of the experience and deepens the reader's immersion in the story.


*Penw* Suggestions

While the story is compelling, I think there are a few areas where clarity could be improved; perhaps providing a bit more foreshadowing could help. Additionally, the motivations and culture of the Beakers could be further explored to add depth to the narrative and provide a better understanding of their actions.


*Penw* Overall

Overall, this is a compelling narrative that successfully blends science fiction with elements of horror and survival. The story’s strength lies in its detailed setting. By expanding on the background and motivations of the alien characters and smoothing the transitions between scenes, the story could potentially be even stronger. This narrative shows a lot of promise with its unique premise and dramatic execution. Nice work!


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