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 |  | The Journals of Mary Brownstone  [E] A secretary dreams of being a journalist and gets an unlikely shot. Writer's Cramp winner.  |
| (4.5)| Hi Elizabeth  This review was written on behalf of House Targaryen as part of "Game of Thrones" ! Disclaimer The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise. What I liked ... This diary entry captured my imagination. It made me laugh, as well, and that is a great prize this morning.  From the beginning, I was intrigued by Mary Brownstone. I wanted to know her story, and I was not disappointed. Because this is a diary entry, you can let your readers know some setting and context without having to go into long explanations. I like that. Straight away, I was in the late 1960s, and I knew attitudes to women having careers were different then from today. So it made sense when Mary said the things about her husband not wanting her to work, and definitely not wanting her to be a reporter. Although that made me dislike her husband somewhat, I had to remember that times were different then. But Mary Brownstone is one courageous woman. Her boss, the dreadful Mr. Livingston, is away for the day, so when the telephone rings, and Mary is presented with an opportunity to shine, she takes it. I love that! She is a gutsy lady. At the end, she reflected on how, if she never had another word published as long as she lived, this published story would be enough for her. That felt real. The cows made me laugh! Cows, everywhere. They had escaped their farm and were busy eating the lawns of all the properties on Main Street, Memphis. When Mary received the call, I had no idea where you would take us. I did not guess it would be to cows. That's funny.Suggestions: I have a couple of typo/grammar suggestions: "It was wonderful to say I was from a newspaper though; I finally feel like ..." I think it should be finally felt, past tense. The rest of the sentence is past tense. Also, " ...and submitted it to assistant editor ..." I would say to the assistant editor. Parting comments: I'm not surprised this is a Writer's Cramp winner. It is astute, funny, and your narrator pulls the reader inside the story with her. I enjoyed this very much. Choconut    My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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