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 A Medal for Sven  [13+]
When a little girl teaches Sven three magical words--how many are saved?
by Joto-Kai
Review of A Medal for Sven  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Greetings and Happy Account Anniversary!

This is an enjoyable story, showing us a young man finding the strength within when he stands up for one weaker than himself. Though his reality may not have changed substantially, his attitude has, and he will be the better for it.

I enjoyed the showing style and the way you’ve portrayed the characters. Sven is a likable fellow who understands the dangers of giving in to his dark side and struggles with being bullied.

The tension and conflict is set up well, and the ending is satisfying as we see his self esteem coming in. The little details seem a bit vague; I had to read it a couple times to tie it all together. The three words from the little girl took a moment to sink in. And the wizard stuff was a bit unusual for me. But I’m just saying my impressions… though I said I find fairytales easier to write, I don’t really read much in the way of fantasy (I’ve hardly read much fiction at all in the past few years…) and am not especially familiar with the tropes. But to anyone else it’s quite easy and understandable.

I don’t see anything I would suggest to change. Perhaps you can submit it to Max Griffin 🏳️‍🌈 and his Cross Timbers Review Spot for thoughts that might be more useful.

Fiddly formatting details: a word count would be nice, especially if you wanted to drop by "SENIOR CENTER FORUM"  and submit it (2000 word limit).

I enjoyed reading this.

Take care, thanks for sharing and keep writing *Smile* *HeartT*


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