\"Writing.Com
*Magnify*
SPONSORED LINKS
Printed from https://shop.writing.com/main/my_feedback/action/view/id/4753118
Review #4753118
Viewing a review of:
 The Lycanthrope's Dizain Open in new Window. [E]
A dizain (about a werewolf?)
by Weirdone-Back in the games Author Icon
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
Access:  Public | Hide Review (?)
Interesting switch on a subject. I expected the usual werewolf shtik but your werewolf took a different path. it sounds like a monthly werewolf carnival to me. I can see it in the woods run by gypsies, because who else would cater to a bunch of werewolves? But if this is how they spend their time as wolves where do new werewolves come from? this opens up questions for me on how your lycanthropic curse works in the world you created. Is it passed by a bite or by mummy and daddy werewolves having baby werewolves? do they take their pups to the carnival or do they leave them home with a dogsitter? Oh, so many cool paths this could take as a story.

Okay now to the readability. i would recommend placing the description of the form that you used in a drop note or a popnote it would clean up the way your poem is displayed. When I write a poem I usually put any prompt or form descriptions in a drop note at the bottom of the piece. I lead with the poem because it is the priority. I add the drop note to answer any questions about it.

*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!Open in new Window..
   *CheckG* You responded to this review 05/21/2024 @ 7:38pm EDT
Printed from https://shop.writing.com/main/my_feedback/action/view/id/4753118