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| (3.0)| This is an "I Write in 2024" review!Hello, Angelica Weatherby-Star on top! Thank you for supporting this great activity!  Overall Impression:You have captured the essence of a typical grumpy day effectively. Form, Rhythm, Cadence, and Style:Free verse is a good choice for the topic. It has allowed you to create short, clipped sentences that are associated with grumpiness, particularly grumpiness brought on by lack of sleep. Your stylistic choice to use plain language and forgo metaphorical connections works well with the theme and prompt. Content:Your poem is straightforward in its delivery and hits on all the major pain points of a bad morning. By directly referencing the search for coffee, the statement about lack of sleep, and the lost purse create a relatable scene for the majority of readers. Grammar and Mechanics:I found no glaring spelling or grammar errors. With the final line, you have written, "must be found sooner or later." If you meant to communicate indifference, that line is fine. If you intended to continue (or increase) the frustration/grumpiness, "sooner rather than later" might be more effective. Final Thoughts:I believe the straightforward and no-nonsense delivery of a very justifiable grumpy morning will resonate with the majority of readers. Thank you for sharing your work with us! Jayngle Bells  My approach to reviews: "I'll Explain, but not Disclaim"
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You responded to this review 05/27/2024 @ 3:13pm EDT