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Given: Jun 7, 2024 at 2:52pm
Length: 1,141 Characters |
1,008 w/o WritingML
My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.
THE POEM
A sweet poem about two turtles who might actually like each other.
WHAT I LIKED
The rythme used had a nice rhythm and beat when spoke out loud.
STRUCTURE
This is a poem with 5 quatrains and an AABB rythme scheme.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.
DESCRIPTIONS
I liked: "A pleasant turtle, snoring deep – For eighteen hours, not a peep." This is a nice, easy rythme that says a lot. We can picture a turtle just chillin' and sleeping and enjoying his peace.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
The opening invites the reader in with an easy beat and keeps them reading. The title is descriptive for the poem. I enjoyed the lighthearted love story and I can see where this would appeal to children around 3-5 years.
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