This review comes to you from HSP's "HSPs - The Basics of Erotic Writing"   by Purple Holiday Princess

Characters:
As Ted and Sandra make love, there is a sense of unity with this couple that I enjoy. They have good chemistry and I love the banter. Your dialog is so natural between them that it makes me smile as things begin to happen.

Setting:
Good pacing in this one too, and it moved fluidly. I did wonder if she woke up in a fog afterward. Is it easy to come to after the intensity of everything that transpired between them? Did it frighten Sandra, or was in warm and enticing?


Overall Impression:
After she wakes and Ted tells her that he can only bite her two more times before she must turn, I wondered if it shocked her. What is she feeling in that specific moment?

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