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| (3.5)| This is an "I Write in 2024" review!Hello, Genipher! Thank you for supporting this great activity!  Overall Impression:This was a creative interpretation of the subject matter. Title and Description: Both the title and description are relevant to the item. That said, the description could offer more intrigue. I don't disagree that 'dredging' is appropriate in terms of word functionality, but I do wonder if there's something stronger to better draw readers in and encourage them to click through and read. Hook and plot:Your use of the graveyard to underline the story's message makes sense in the context of the underlying beliefs attached to subject. The story unfolds in an appropriate manner, progressing in an easy to follow narrative. Characters and dialogue:You've included solid details to ensure the characters are not one-dimensional. The baby bonnet has an outsized impact in relation to the rest of the story. While it certainly wasn't the intent of the story, it's a heavy piece of information once the reader reaches the story's conclusion. If the baby is indeed the neighbour, it's a heartbreaking moment. Grammar and Mechanics:The mechanics of story writing are sound. I found no glaring spelling or grammar errors. Final Thoughts:Your story was an interesting take on the prompt, and your writing should resonate with the intended audience. Thank you for sharing your work with us! Jayngle Bells  My approach to reviews: "I'll Explain, but not Disclaim"
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