Hello, Dreamward Bound!

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INITIAL IMPRESSION / OVERVIEW:

You wrote a powerful, dark, emotional relationship poem.

Your writing kept me riveted and I read straight through to the end.



MORE DETAILED FEEDBACK:

You engaged my emotions as I read this emotional relationship poem of yours.

I liked the physical elements. I could, in my mind, hear the window slam and door close.

I liked the analogies you used. I hadn't heard the window one compared to a person before. I felt like that one was especially powerful.

I loved the ending, because it was powerful, though I hoped this poem wasn't true to life. If it was, my heart goes out to you on that terrible relationship.

I didn't notice any spelling or grammatical mistakes (or mistakes of any kind) in your emotional relationship poem.

I thought the relationship and personal genres you selected were perfect for this emotional relationship poem of yours.

Because you're new here, and I remember what it was like to really want to get to that first 10 community recognition credits, I'm cordially inviting you to join my Habit Heroes challenge. You can earn an exclusive merit badge there every month. "Habit Heroes "  No pressure though! Just join if it appeals to you. The deadline to join for this month (and every month) is the seventh though, so if you are interested, be sure to sign up soon. It's free!


IDEAS TO MAKE YOUR PIECE STRONGER:
In the spirit of helpfulness (and because of the rules of the Tour de Ports review challenge I'm in - you're welcome to join! The link should be at the bottom of my review), I have a suggestion to make your piece stronger.

The only thing I can think of, is to change your "other" genre to something else, perhaps "dark" or "experience." This one obviously isn't about your writing (that's great!), but just to help you possibly get more readers, and, should someone decide to nominate this poem of yours for a Quill award, could let you get included in more categories. The Quill awards are a big deal here! You probably haven't heard of it before so I'll go get a link for you. Here you go: "Quill Nomination Form 2024"  ... there are other links you can click through from there. You, even as a brand new member here, can nominate other's work if you like too. Anything you think is stellar - nominate. That's my personal rule of thumb. We aren't allowed to share what we nominate - it's all secret, but I find that it's a joy to nominate others and an honor to be nominated.

Back to your genre. "other" isn't something I think anyone ever searches for. But probably people here do search for "dark" and "experience." As the host of a review challenge I once entered says (I think it was Jody Schnujo but am not 100% sure): "Genres help people find items to read/review and can increase your odds of being included in a Newsletter (because your item was spotted by a [Moderator] looking for genre items) or even increase your odds of winning "The Quills" (because it can be entered into multiple genre categories for additional chances to win)." The Quill Awards are a big deal here. It's a great honor to be nominated, I think, and your odds increase with more people viewing and liking your poem.



CONCLUSION:
You have a great writing style and I enjoyed reading your emotional relationship poem of yours.

Thank you for sharing your time, creativity, and writing with the Writing.Com community!

Once again, welcome to Writing.Com!


May love, joy and peace be yours in abundance!
PWheeler







Positive Hearts
A Review from: "Positive Hearts Reviews Group" 


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