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Transformation!  [E]
How my dream transformed.
by Bodhisattwa Parekh
Review of Transformation!  
Review by Choconut
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Bodhisattwa Parekh ,

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What I liked:

*Bulletv* What a delightful little poem. I really like this. It may be only a few lines, but they say so much about you and what is important to you. I wonder whether you still paint with brushes, just for relaxation, maybe?

*Bulletv* I love how you compare the art of painting with the art of creating stories. Words verses pictures. I love it. I've always considered myself as completely lacking in creativity. But, then, someone said to me that that's not true because I create with words. And that is just what you are saying in this poem. I love it.

*Bulletv* I really love that notion that words are art. This little poem has such a feel-good feeling.


Suggestions: Just a minor point. You begin two consecutive sentences with the word "But." I would simply take out the second one, so leave the lines as, "But, not through my brush / Through my pens." I think that works better.


Parting comments: I really like this little poem. I think you have painted a beautiful picture of writing as an art form. I am interested to know whether you still paint, though.

Thanks for sharing this poem.


Choconut
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