Hi Silverwindros Dragon Minstrel,


This is a fantastic story. The tone is tinged with urgency. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering what Gem will do to help the human. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a non-human person finds a frightened human who was thrown from their horse and has to figure out what to do with them during some sort of chaotic event. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characterization is fully developed and believable. The story concentrates on Gem, and she comes across as a real person. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.