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 Imperfections Perfection  [E]
I'm not perfect. You're not perfect. The world isn't perfect.
by yojina
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Dear yojina ,

This poem, "Imperfections Perfection" sums up everything I've ever believed about perceptions of perfect, where it lies/hides in flaws that make something unique (a singer's raspy voice). While unique makes me think of rarified, collectible, out of reach (like a unicorn), as was the dream of finding our way back to Utopia or the Fountain of Youth. You've described it as the little things that are tied to a cozy existence and memories we cherish from life experiences that can offer those 'badges of honor'.

I find the use of listing items that could seem mundane to anyone else as revealing how each holds special value unto the holder, evidence of what we value as priceless, and can be touchstones for memory. I too have shirts I won't get rid of, or wear anymore. There are things from childhood to photos and much more, because I can be a pack rat.

As for a crooked smile, usually from one we adore. I've described my mom's happiness exhibited in an upside down frown. There is a special fondness and exuberance revealed in your writing style, and with the narrative approach, as dreamy with a pleasant quality. There was a conversational style. You definitely went free verse on this with those long lines and then shorter when listing. I feel it's flow did not obstruct the read.

Everyone should know we're not perfect and that nothing can be perfect overall, unless when thinking of a pop star, celebrity, song. I think perfect moments happen. But, if you can imagine something better, they're just ideal. And if you listen to people respond with 'perfect' after answering a question, I'm give to wonder why the catchy switch from 'great', 'awesome', 'good' as ideally fine pronouncements. Could the unspoken part of your poem allow a reader to consider why dreams of fairytale lives, rather than aiming a little lower with hope as an open door to possibility. I think a lot of people fail to perform the simplest of tasks and meet deadlines, because of perfectionism.

Yup, gives me a lot to chew on with this poem. Thank you for sharing and the inspiration this offers a reader, yojina. Love the name. Hard J, soft J, silent consonants, Swedish? I have a niece, Yessica/Jessica.

Sincerely,

Brian
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