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Tribute to Cpl Hollis Rodell Sweatt USAF Open in new Window. [E]
My father, Hollis Rodell Sweatt, 1929-1988, was a quiet, hard-working man.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE MEMOIR/TRIBUTE

The author shares warm memories of his father.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I enjoyed the voice of the story. It drew me right in. I felt like I was sitting across from the author on a porch, enjoying a drink as he talked.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the first person. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* THEME

For me, I picked out the theme of an honest work ethic, and it's that's a character trait which connects with people. It's something to be admired. Though there is a scene where the father sets the son up for $200 fine. *Smirk*

*Star* EMOTIONAL BEATS
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*CheckR* *Checkr* *Checkr* There were some nice, heartwarming emotional beats in the story. You got a picture of what 'Dad' was like - a hard worker with a good work ethic, who tried to take care of his students, when they needed help. He tried to be a good role model. That steadiness is something a lot of people appreciate.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening drew the reader in. The writing is candid, honest, and sincere.

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